Planning - Script - Third Draft

FADE IN: 

INT. DARK ROOM - NIGHT 

A lamp flashes on and reveals a man, SEAN SAUNDERS, slouching in a chair on one side of a table. The lamp shines directly into his face to reveal bruising and blood coming from his mouth. He is handcuffed to the chair. At the other end of the table is a second man, DR. BANES. His face is partially hidden beneath shadows.

DR. BANES

Is he dead? 

SEAN SAUNDERS nods slowly. 

DR. BANES bites off a pen lid from his pen and ticks a sheet of paper. As he removes the lid from his mouth he grins. 

DR. BANES

Your father would be proud.

SEAN SAUNDERS raises his head. His voice is raised. He leans forward in his chair. 

SEAN SAUNDERS

You don't speak to my father like that. I thought we had a deal. 

DR. BANES chuckles gently. He pauses. He pulls out a picture from his blazer pocket and slides it across the table. His silver watch gleams in the light from the lamp. 

DR. BANES

I need you to do one more thing. 

SEAN SAUNDERS glances at the picture. He looks up and shakes his head slowly. DR BANES smiles gently. He mutters under his breath. 

DR. BANES

Pity. 

DR. BANES reaches over to the lamp in the center of the table. He flicks the switch. The room turns pitch black. 

CUT TO: 

EXT. GRAVE YARD - NIGHT

DANIEL SEYMOUR'S silhouetted figure walks along a path towards a deserted church yard. He pauses at the entrance and adjusts his watch. He walks through the entrance and into the grave yard, as he does so he glances up at the clock on the church and straightens his tie. 

This is the third version of my script for my opening 2 minutes of a film. The changes I have made from my second version include: 

• Changing the name of a character to Dr Banes. I did this because I thought the original name was a little cliche and I needed something which was realistic, yet had the same effect. 
• Changing the second scene to only including a single character. I thought this would show the character off more than when a second character is introduced. This is because the character may act differently when alone, and, since he is one of the main characters, I wish to let the audience to know who this character is therefore allowing them into the story.