Planning - Script - First draft

This is my first draft of my script. In this draft I have tried to use the structure and style of the script mentioned before, which I found relativity difficult as I had to keep adjusting and readjusting things so as to only include what is really necessary.
As the is a first draft, I am willing to make changes and to modify it if any comments are made in which I can use to develop this idea further.


FADE IN:

INT. DARK ROOM - NIGHT

A lamp flashes on and reveals a man (MAN 1) sat in a chair on one side of a table. His face is bruised. He is handcuffed. There are lots of pieces of paper on a table in front of the man. A knife sticks out of the table. At the other side is a second man (MAN 2). His face is hidden beneath shadows.

MAN 2

Is he dead? 

MAN 1 nods.

FLASHBACK, screams are heard. Distorted visions of a river's rapids are seen. 

MAN 2, bites off pen lid and ticks a sheet of paper. As he removes the lid he grins. 

MAN 2

Your father would be proud.

MAN 1, raises his head. His voice is raised. 

MAN 1 

You don't speak about my father like that, I thought we had a deal. 

MAN 2, chuckles gently. He pauses.

FLASHBACK, more screams. A figure can be seen looming over the river.

MAN 2, pulls out a picture from his coat pocket. 

MAN 2 

I need you to do one more thing. 

MAN 2, he slides a picture across the table. He is wearing a silver watch, MAN 1 looks at the picture. He looks up and shakes his head slowly. MAN 2 smiles gently. He mutters under his breath. 

MAN 2

Pity. 

MAN 2 reaches over to the lamp in the center of the table. He flicks the switch. 

FADE IN: 

EXT. TOURIST DESTINATION - DAY

One man is taking a picture of a statue. His camera flashes.